P4

Feedback:
After sending off my script, I received some feedback to make the formatting correct and the story flow better. One of these pieces of feedback was that my sluglines and my action lines needed to have a gap in-between them. The action line also needed more detail in the way the characters look and act. this would have made it harder for the actors to play the character and the audience then to understand the actor. 

I also had some action lines and dialog lines which told the audience what was happening instead of showing them. It was important that I showed not told as it makes the audience work out what is happening and makes the show more enjoyable. I had some parts of my script that included incorrect grammar. for example i put brackets around the EXT's where I didn't need to put them